Coffin Hop

Coffin Hop Challenge – Episode Six: Desperation

The Coffin Hop Challenge continues into day six!

Read Episode One here

Read Episode Two here

Read Episode Three here

Read Episode Four here

Read Episode Five here


Episode Six: Desperation

The illumination from Brian’s smartphone screen seemed extra bright in the confines of the cramped space. The group continued to move forward until they came upon a bisecting hallway.

“Which way do you want to go?” Brian asked without turning around as he strained to see what was down each of the hallways. “Does anyone have a preference?”

“I say we split up.” It was Clara who made the suggestion.

Brian wasn’t sure it was the best idea but figured he’d better keep quiet or else look like he was scared in front of Greta’s husband. He continued to scan each of the directions, looking for the way that seemed the least scary of the three.

No one spoke for a few minutes until Greta piped up, her voice a little more high-pitched than normal. “Ummm, sure I guess. I mean if you guys want to, I suppose we’d be able to investigate these tunnels faster if we did.”

“Then it’s settled, we’ll go one way, you guys go another.” Clara turned to catch a flash of fear cross Brian’s face before it settled back into his usual smile. She could tell the smile was for show, but it would be great to get him alone down here. “Brian, why don’t you and I take the left tunnel?”

“Sure thing Clara – let’s go.” The two of them continued down the hallway, leaving Greta and her husband alone to decide if they wanted to continue forward or give up and go backward. Up ahead, the passageway turned right and soon the young couple was out of sight and mind.

“Why are we doing this Clara?”

“What do you mean, Brian? I thought you wanted to investigate.”

“Sure, I mean yeah, but now we’ve just gone deeper into the house and we’ve gotten ourselves horribly turned around. I’m not even sure I can get us out of here.”

“I’m sure we’ll come to another door soon Brian, no need to worry. Besides, I thought you liked being alone with me…” Brian turned around to find Clara smiling at him, her sweet face angelic – almost a little too angelic for his liking.

“What do you have up your sleeve woman?”

“What do you mean? I’m not even wearing sleeves!” She wrapped her arms around him and leaned in for a kiss. Losing himself for a moment in the pleasure, Brian didn’t even notice his phone being taken from his hand.

And in a moment she was gone, the light from the phone disappearing into the inky blackness that consumed the air around him. Panic set in, causing Brian to weave erratically. When his face hit the wall next to him, he heard the sickening crunch of a broken nose. He howled in pain, hoping it would bring Clara back to him.

It didn’t and within what seemed like hours but was really only a few minutes, he began to find it hard to breathe. As the walls closed in on him, he searched along them for anything, but finding only dirt and cobwebs which stuck to his fingers.

Brian screamed as he moved, hands splayed before him, hoping someone beyond the tight brickwork of the passageway would hear him. He searched every crevasse for an exit, the desperation sinking in. Ripping off a fingernail did nothing to deter him in his madness to find a way out.

Sinking to the ground while cradling his bloody hand in the other, Brian was close to losing it. Looking to his left, he saw a faint glow off in the distance. Before he lost consciousness, he wondered to himself: was it an exit?

All Rights Reserved © 2013 Julianne Snow


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